Wednesday, March 23, 2011

ATTENTION CRUSADERS .... SECOND CHALLENGE ENTRY




Hello everyone. This past Friday or leader Rach from Rach Writes ... has issued another challenge. This time we have to create an entry of flash fiction starting with "The goldfish bowl teetered ..."

If we write in our genre, in my case, y/a or m/g fantasy/contemporary, we receive extra credit. Well my entry certainly has a whimsical, yet nasty, combination off all. I hope you are all amused.


The goldfish bowl teetered, splashing water onto Foucault’s whiskers. Inches from his gleaming eyes, the delicate, fan-tailed goldfish multiplied in size. He pricked his ears and twitched his tabby-striped tale.

The golden scales reflected in his eyes smoked grey, and the long elegant fans shrunk to mere paddles. Facing Foucault, jagged teeth smiled back at him.
Startled, Foucault leapt into the air. The fish propelled itself, opened its mouth and swallowed him hole. It landed in the bowl an elegant goldfish once more.
“Here, kitty, kitty, kitty.”
Bubbles formed on top of the bowl as the goldfish snickered.







41 comments:

Rachael Harrie said...

Ooh, great twist Michael, love it :) And those pikkies are awesome!

Hugs,

Rach

Cherie Reich said...

I agree with Rach. The pictures are amazing. I think the twist is great, but poor kitty.

Anonymous said...

Love that top pic! It really sets up the situation. Nice job!

Vicki

T.D. McFrost said...

I love it too!

Great job! :D

Talli Roland said...

Aw, poor poor kitty. Loved it, Michael! :)

Summer Ross said...

LOL- well there's a twist I didn't see coming. Nice job!

Angela said...

Now that's one killer goldfish.

Anonymous said...

I'm always a sucker for the little guy! Go, little fishy! Very visual, Michael. And love the pics!!

Carol Riggs said...

Mwuah-ha-ha! So much for that cat! LOL Nice take from the homicidal fishy angle. Great photos too. :)

Deniz Bevan said...

Aww, poor kitty cat! Wonder what else that fish is going to get up to...

Michael Offutt, Phantom Reader said...

I love the pictures that you chose to accentuate your flash fiction entry. Also the story is awesome...I like the twist in that the fish eats the cat. Completely unexpected.

Michael, I wanted to pass on to you an award that you don't have yet that's on my latest blog entry. It's the "You're blog doesn't suck" award created by Roguemutt over on his blog and he gave it to me as an award. Anyway, if you'd like it, please have a visit and claim it for your gorgeous blog and then (like the others) pass it on to five more people :) Have a fantastic day.

Sylvia Ney said...

Unfortunately, I did not join the crusade, but I'm looking forward to the "A to Z" challenge and reading more from you - great post. Thanks for sharing!

Sierra Gardner said...

Great twist with the fish eating the cat - I totally didn't see that coming.

Ben Langhinrichs said...

Good twist. Win one for the little guy (guppy?)

Golden Eagle said...

Revenge for all past-beleaguered goldfish? :D

I love the twist in your story!

Michelle Merrill said...

Oh, I loved that :) Way to make the fish win. I swear the cat always gets the glory.

Nas said...

So the fish turned the table on the cat! Great!

BTW, I'm hosting Roland D Yeomans today, who self-published his book THE BEAR WITH TWO SHADOWS and is sharing his journey with us as well as a four book giveaway!

jkraus8464 said...

That was one hell raiser of a goldfish. Great ending! I love the picture.

Unknown said...

Love the story! (and the picture too)

The Fish Strikes Back has a nice ring to it ... is there a screenplay in the works? :-)

J.C. Martin said...

*LOL* Awesome story, a Jekyll & Hyde fish!

Denise Covey said...

Michel Foucault indeed Michael. What a wicked story. Loved it. (Maybe you'll wipe the ABNA blues away by winning this! Well, it might help...). And those pics are so good! Could hang around looking at that glittering goldie all day if only i had time.

Denise<3

The Words Crafter said...

Whoa, I did NOT see that coming, well done! Love the twist :)))

Trisha said...

That sparkly fishy pic is so cute :) Nice story :D

Danette said...

Very nice! An evil goldfish!! How many goldfish or birds of dreamt of that! Enjoyed it very much!

Joanna St. James said...

oh mon dieu!what an evil but perfectly adorable fish. I dont even feel bad for the cat, is that bad?

N. R. Williams said...

Now that was funny, I loved it.
Nancy
N. R. Williams, The Treasures of Carmelidrium.

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Really loved the funny twist at the end! Roland

Roland D. Yeomans said...

I love it : I've gone from 96 yesterday to 91 today! Wow, your counter is trying to gaslight me. Roland

PK HREZO said...

Aww, super cute! And I love that name Foucault. :)

Sylvia said...

a snickering goldfish! brilliant!!!!

Unknown said...

Great entry! I loved the shift in power, what a twist! Interesting name for the cat, too :))

Anonymous said...

Fabulous and I love the pictures you found!

Alison Pearce Stevens said...

Ha! This was great! Especially the snickering goldfish. :)

Lisa Potts said...

Wonderful! I love it when the underdog...uh, fish wins.

Cally Jackson said...

Revenge at last! Great idea!

Margo Benson said...

That had me laughing out loud! Excellent revenge story with wonderful piccies too!

Thank you for your kind comments about me and MrB :-)

Donea Lee said...

Ah! Goldfish revenge!! Love it ~ :) Michael, this is a great twist on the prompt. Thanks!

Witless Exposition said...

Great job! I'm glad that one of the goldfish from the crusaders got their revenge. :)

Anonymous said...

Great twist didn't see it coming. Great job!

Alison Miller said...

Yes! Revenge of the Goldfish! Cute story!

Kari Marie said...

Naughty fish! I love your twist to the story.