tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post6148367345122387920..comments2023-11-16T20:34:36.744-06:00Comments on ... MICHAEL DI GESU ... ... ... In Time ... ...: EARTHLY ANGELS .... A SPECIAL EDITION- A TRIBUTE TO MOMS ..... Brenda Drake's Entry.Michael Di Gesuhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comBlogger57125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-26270878974873957562011-02-09T14:06:18.699-06:002011-02-09T14:06:18.699-06:00Wow, so many wonderful comments! Thanks for shari...Wow, so many wonderful comments! Thanks for sharing about your mother, Michael. Children are what make us moms great though, and you sound like you had a lot to do with your mother's greatness :)Abby Minardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11963640263845561309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-88510040478134284342011-02-08T22:07:45.579-06:002011-02-08T22:07:45.579-06:00So sorry to hear about your loss. I'm sure yes...So sorry to hear about your loss. I'm sure yesterday was really hard. Sending you virtual hugs from the blogosphere. My mother calls incessantly and it generally drives me insane. But after reading your post, I won't mind so much today. I like the revised version of your first line. I'd read on for sure.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08798243128846248604noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-35222710813190776852011-02-08T21:10:26.376-06:002011-02-08T21:10:26.376-06:00This is a special way to honor your mom, Michael. ...This is a special way to honor your mom, Michael. Thanks for including moms everywhere. You're a special and thoughtful person. <br /><br />I like your first line better because it's simpler. But I like what you're getting at with the second, and I can see why you changed it. Hmmm...A way to combine the simplicity and the specificity. "My life as a living punching bag changed after meeting Danny." "My dad used me as a living punching bag and until I met Danny, I let him." Okay, maybe not. Just wanted to give it a shot! CHRISTYerica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-41710591668412719792011-02-08T17:55:10.424-06:002011-02-08T17:55:10.424-06:00Michael - Good luck with your first line. I like i...Michael - Good luck with your first line. I like it. =DRaShelle Workmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582252557500502186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-76700004600576246182011-02-08T16:33:04.429-06:002011-02-08T16:33:04.429-06:00*hugz* Sorry for your loss!
Thank you for remindi...*hugz* Sorry for your loss!<br /><br />Thank you for reminding me of the blogfest! I nearly forgot! I like your simple line. It raises lots of questions and expectations.J.C. Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01567971311643106302noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-60785549557525415082011-02-08T14:19:41.112-06:002011-02-08T14:19:41.112-06:00A Michael bear hug- wonderful! *hugs back*
Thank ...A Michael bear hug- wonderful! *hugs back*<br /><br />Thank you for the encouraging words to moms everywhere. Your mom would be proud, I am sure.<br /><br />I like your revised line better than the first. How about "human punching bag" instead of "living"?<br /><br />CyndiAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01332426347997158850noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-17773348863858145282011-02-08T13:34:53.051-06:002011-02-08T13:34:53.051-06:00This is such a wonderful message, Michael. Thank ...This is such a wonderful message, Michael. Thank you. I lost my mom unexpectedly back in 2006 and I've missed her every single day since. She was such a champion of my dream to be a published author - one of my biggest fans! Not to mention, the anchor and the life to our little family. She made everything fun. She was the keeper of our traditions and a wonderful friend. I'm tearing up just typing this... but, I agree. A FABULOUS mom is such an important influence for a child and I can only applaud the women out there that rise to the challenge! :) (btw - your second 1st sentence is much stronger - great job!)Donea Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15393184831994368021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-86628688280232553602011-02-08T12:59:49.732-06:002011-02-08T12:59:49.732-06:00Thank you for your beautiful message of encouragem...Thank you for your beautiful message of encouragement - and the bear hug!<br /><br />I don't have a sure comment about your first line... I prefer the first version because shorter & simpler definitely seems more powerful. And yet it doesn't have as much "voice" as it could... Hmm... I don't know!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06181241692016438730noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-51435244522837484302011-02-08T12:55:09.218-06:002011-02-08T12:55:09.218-06:00Thank you! What a wonderful tribute to mothers.Thank you! What a wonderful tribute to mothers.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-74917491592480456552011-02-08T11:16:41.087-06:002011-02-08T11:16:41.087-06:00Michael, You made me cry. I'm so sorry for the...Michael, You made me cry. I'm so sorry for the loss of your mother, but a mother's love is never lost. In my novel I touch on this theme. Touch, heck... it's woven throughout. My protagonist lost her mother when she was young. But even beyond the grave she taught her daughter the lessons of life. And as a mother, our kids teach us too. Your Mom is so proud of you, and you thought of her all day because she was with you all day. <br /><br />I love your first line! It's short and powerful. Speaks volumes. Sets the tone. The character. And I want to know why. Excellent job.Karlene Petitthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17910702587514001827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-75811181021732684962011-02-08T10:38:20.486-06:002011-02-08T10:38:20.486-06:00I liked your revised line. Lots of tension. Thanks...I liked your revised line. Lots of tension. Thanks for dropping by my blog!Shelley Wattershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01441028066774362849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-4903485978596517952011-02-08T10:23:42.922-06:002011-02-08T10:23:42.922-06:00Love your Angel. Loved your first line too.Love your Angel. Loved your first line too.Annhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07524878248746427258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-54386854973442759512011-02-08T09:56:43.088-06:002011-02-08T09:56:43.088-06:00This is a great post. You sound so spiritual.This is a great post. You sound so spiritual.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-47754811872972073482011-02-08T09:12:30.394-06:002011-02-08T09:12:30.394-06:00I love this new version, Michael! What if you cha...I love this new version, Michael! What if you changed 'altered' to 'changed'? You've probably gone back and forth but 'changed' hits the beat harder and feels more effective to me. Just a thought.Linda Grayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18001433214194860481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-86685575313416168162011-02-08T07:52:28.042-06:002011-02-08T07:52:28.042-06:00What a lovely post!
As for your first line: I lov...What a lovely post!<br /><br />As for your first line: I love the tweaked version. It certainly gives it some punch (like literally, LOL!)!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-21762347631051932782011-02-08T05:48:07.869-06:002011-02-08T05:48:07.869-06:00Meeting Danny altered the only life I knew: a livi...Meeting Danny altered the only life I knew: a living punching bag.<br /><br />You have "life" and then "living" in just a few words, and it makes the opening sound repetitive. I'd rewrite again to convey the same meaning, but with different words.<br /><br />I wrote about my own mother on the anniversary of her passing in a piece called Wildcats.<br /><br />http://richardlevangie.com/blog/2010/06/06/wildcats/Richard Levangiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16596356126446766607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-54146129899331216662011-02-08T04:36:43.153-06:002011-02-08T04:36:43.153-06:00Sorry to hear about your mom. They are so very imp...Sorry to hear about your mom. They are so very important part of our lives. <br /><br />I like the first line, but I agree it needs a little more.Miranda Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17880449368013410349noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-2570249069175735152011-02-07T23:47:42.504-06:002011-02-07T23:47:42.504-06:00I like your first line, I want to know how this Da...I like your first line, I want to know how this Danny guy happens :D<br /><br />Also, my mother is THE BOMB. She is a legend, and my best friend.Trishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-11412551779203290392011-02-07T22:26:23.903-06:002011-02-07T22:26:23.903-06:00I really like your second version of the line. And...I really like your second version of the line. And your post about mothers and teachers was so nice. I read it aloud to my roomie.BK Mattinglyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13758638245846622284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-47934079570092934612011-02-07T21:53:10.777-06:002011-02-07T21:53:10.777-06:00Wow do I like the second version much better. Adds...Wow do I like the second version much better. Adds voice and sets the tone for what's to come.<br /><br />Great line!<br /><br />Christi CorbettAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-28444449714608789992011-02-07T21:19:55.856-06:002011-02-07T21:19:55.856-06:00Great post about your mother. From a mother, I kno...Great post about your mother. From a mother, I know your mom would be very proud of you, Michael. Love the second version of your first line. Good luck and don't forget to post to my blog in the contest post comments. :DBrenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-20159242256686525482011-02-07T20:16:40.441-06:002011-02-07T20:16:40.441-06:00I'm so sorry Michael. I lost my own mom 23 yea...I'm so sorry Michael. I lost my own mom 23 years ago and my MIL two years ago. I miss them both terribly. Best thing about my mom: singing our lungs out to fifty's music on the 8-track in her Cordoba (with real Corinthian leather!), with the windows down and the wind whipping around us. My mom could be the silliest woman, and I loved that about her.<br /><br />Best thing about my MIL was that she accepted me and loved me, even though I was so different from her. Actually, scratch that. The best thing about her was the amazing son she raised--and who married me. <br /><br />((hugs))ali crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13023009704454279645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-46236334040359564032011-02-07T17:02:23.505-06:002011-02-07T17:02:23.505-06:00It's very painful losing your mum. I've lo...It's very painful losing your mum. I've lost both my parents now and it was heart-wrenching, but parents leave a legacy. The best thing is when that legacy is positive, as it obviously is in your case Michael.<br /><br />I like the way you share your writing projects. Justin Parents has a point. I like his additions, but i'd use some, not all.<br /><br />I posted about your Earthly Angels today, and, ahem, sorry I beat you in the No Fear blogfest. Bit of a surprise!<br /><br />Denise:)<br /><br /><a href="http://laussieswritingblog.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Publication Party - new session Wednesday!</a>Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-70972076318696508292011-02-07T16:44:58.623-06:002011-02-07T16:44:58.623-06:00We are all here for you! my dad passed away on Ear...We are all here for you! my dad passed away on Earth Day, so I understand how hard the anniversary of losing a loved one is so painful. You are a writer. Words are wonderful on days like that. Thank you for sharing with us.<br /><br />Second first line had a little more pep and also brought some intrigue, but it needs some voice.Melissa Deanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10677077308421607728noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-72522756113710896202011-02-07T15:58:00.206-06:002011-02-07T15:58:00.206-06:00Great post. As for the first line, I definitely li...Great post. As for the first line, I definitely like the newer version better. Short and concise, it grabs my attention.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01677563505368503476noreply@blogger.com