tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post7865541804546375302..comments2023-11-16T20:34:36.744-06:00Comments on ... MICHAEL DI GESU ... ... ... In Time ... ...: IT's TIME FOR A NEW BEGINNING ...Michael Di Gesuhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comBlogger70125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-44478723899534672922014-02-05T12:51:22.994-06:002014-02-05T12:51:22.994-06:00My mom always gets the winter blues and a good hou...My mom always gets the winter blues and a good house cleaning and sprucing up of her decor always cheers her up. I never get that. I feel like I am always so busy and pulled in so many different directions that I look forward to the hibernation season. This snow which, which has left me cooped up and snow bound has helped me take a breather and feel like me again. <br /><br />Sorry to hear it's the anniversary of losing your loved ones. That is hard. At the beginning of each fall, I get that melancholy. Blah. It's no fun.<br /><br />Hugs and happy blitz Michael!!!Elizabeth Seckmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00045076826326574984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-86618436766035373882014-02-02T13:43:00.999-06:002014-02-02T13:43:00.999-06:00Good for you -- tackling the challenge of a period...Good for you -- tackling the challenge of a period piece. You are certainly evoking 1940's Chicago here (or what I imagine is 1940s Chicago). You've captured the feel of a Raymond Chandler or Dashiell Hammett. <br /><br />One suggestion, in the opening of this excerpt, we are outside the diner, then inside in the next paragraph. Rosemary is at a booth, then the jukebox, then I'm not sure where. You might want to focus the location in the beginning -- describe Chicago streets outside as Rosemary sees them through the window inside the diner, in her booth. Then we'll know for sure where we are. :)Dianne K. Salernihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16459839567235304842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-82531098450205508712014-02-02T09:49:44.093-06:002014-02-02T09:49:44.093-06:00Really liking the noir-ish tone, and you already k...Really liking the noir-ish tone, and you already know I'm a fan of your descriptions. Nice work, Michael.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-26456400600401242812014-02-02T09:12:36.926-06:002014-02-02T09:12:36.926-06:00But but but!! They left poor Doris on the floor!! ...But but but!! They left poor Doris on the floor!! All swooned out! Oh dear!!!<br /><br />Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-49396056512480950032014-02-02T07:41:54.502-06:002014-02-02T07:41:54.502-06:00How fun Michael! Novellas are totally in right now...How fun Michael! Novellas are totally in right now too, so you could epublish them to Amazon or do serials. And since you do your own covers, you'd be able to work fast. :)PK HREZOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11650153097981426833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-41318919957805804022014-02-02T06:09:13.962-06:002014-02-02T06:09:13.962-06:00"Michael Di Gesu" has been included in t..."Michael Di Gesu" has been included in the A Sunday Drive for this week. Be assured that I hope this helps to point even more new visitors in your direction.<br /><br />http://asthecrackerheadcrumbles.blogspot.com/2014/02/a-sunday-drive.htmlAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16349087080262856079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-23491105934318727382014-02-01T14:03:15.483-06:002014-02-01T14:03:15.483-06:00Never apologize for being late when writing is the...Never apologize for being late when writing is the cause! Here's to more writing. Keep up the good work. :-)cleemckenziehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15456109243453726483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-70496236432005616722014-01-29T21:53:18.341-06:002014-01-29T21:53:18.341-06:00Michael, your writing gets better and better all t...Michael, your writing gets better and better all the time. I have always relished the rich, descriptive language and sensory detail. But I must compliment you on your verb choice, too! The verb is my favorite part of speech, and you do such an amazing job picking the perfect ones. Loved it...as always. Susan Oloierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07311938400999953443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-74718019716270608402014-01-29T19:37:20.251-06:002014-01-29T19:37:20.251-06:00Hey Michael,
Oops, there you go apologising for n...Hey Michael,<br /><br />Oops, there you go apologising for not posting on time. As for me, I apologise for actually doing a posting! :)<br /><br />And enticing and intriguing read, my friend. However, I beg you, good sir, do try to make your stories shorter. I can barely keep up as it is. Anyway, you have a gift for writing that dances off the screen. No, not literally.<br /><br />Gary :) <br />klahaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08613505424843475639noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-22311358604914832882014-01-29T19:23:20.165-06:002014-01-29T19:23:20.165-06:00...love the descriptive prose, Michael. It's d......love the descriptive prose, Michael. It's definitely your niche in the 'biz.' And everyone adores a healthy cliffhanger ;)<br /><br />Great to see how well you're doing to start the new year!<br /><br />ElElliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-88510505288067510102014-01-29T19:20:49.113-06:002014-01-29T19:20:49.113-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.Elliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-2078582393290790712014-01-29T17:08:36.014-06:002014-01-29T17:08:36.014-06:00An interesting piece that I enjoyed reading. Good ...An interesting piece that I enjoyed reading. Good luck to you and your writing.<br /><br />Thank you. Love love, Andrew. Bye.WordsPoeticallyWorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05932809387878012226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-36203236140555508842014-01-29T09:22:13.769-06:002014-01-29T09:22:13.769-06:00I can see the era totally with your expressions an...I can see the era totally with your expressions and the cliffhanger at the end, priceless.Sallyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-12100806188364458102014-01-29T08:12:16.598-06:002014-01-29T08:12:16.598-06:00Cliffhanger! Sounds remarkable!Cliffhanger! Sounds remarkable!Cathrina Constantinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16960849263181625782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-25205560783220563762014-01-29T07:53:28.608-06:002014-01-29T07:53:28.608-06:00Way to leave it on a cliffy! The story is so atmo...Way to leave it on a cliffy! The story is so atmospheric. I hope you found the break from BG to be a good way to rev up for attacking the second half of edits! Nicki Elsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11412032684225126973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-45132925402277714182014-01-29T02:01:05.662-06:002014-01-29T02:01:05.662-06:00Aloha,
Gosh Michael, you really can describe a sc...Aloha,<br /><br />Gosh Michael, you really can describe a scene and I kept expecting Bogart or Bacall to waltz in :)<br /><br />Great read and let me know when it's done - if you need a beta reader, I'd love to :)Mark Koopmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03634424953074803816noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-29813546215176433502014-01-28T11:50:02.678-06:002014-01-28T11:50:02.678-06:00Of course I love the setting and the time period. ...Of course I love the setting and the time period. Will this be a novella or novel? As usual, your writing is very visual. <br /><br />P.S. Hope you are staying warm today! My sister texted me to tell me it was something, like, 47 below in Glen Ellyn. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-83632199873538727332014-01-28T07:26:00.516-06:002014-01-28T07:26:00.516-06:00That bought back vivid memories of when my father ...That bought back vivid memories of when my father used to smoke cigars. At least he did until I set up a fan one day to blow the smoke at my brother. Hey, it wasn't my fault he was sitting there at the time. lol<br /><br />Great job, Michael. You have a way with description. Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-22195280304754109432014-01-27T16:01:41.885-06:002014-01-27T16:01:41.885-06:00Very nice, Michael!Very nice, Michael!Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-53500192768587023832014-01-27T15:27:28.164-06:002014-01-27T15:27:28.164-06:00Vivid imagery, Michael. Love the project. Good luc...Vivid imagery, Michael. Love the project. Good luck with it.<br /><br />Thanks for visiting my blog and commenting.<br /><br /><a href="http://marymontaguesikes.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Mary Montague Sikes</a>Notes Along the Way with Mary Montague Sikeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17417679983279135001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-859735019497891562014-01-27T10:31:03.744-06:002014-01-27T10:31:03.744-06:00Okay that was a wow, especially toward the end. Th...Okay that was a wow, especially toward the end. This shows literary talent, and even though I knew the ending had to go that way, I liked how you did it, made me want to know how she's going to get out of it...! Thanks for dropping by my blog and commenting! Lisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06658507579160418855noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-47261422186390582412014-01-27T07:58:08.049-06:002014-01-27T07:58:08.049-06:00 I really like your writing. Hopefully someday we ... I really like your writing. Hopefully someday we will be able to have a book written by you 8-DJackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04395502314886308773noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-65396191476229340212014-01-25T18:59:33.254-06:002014-01-25T18:59:33.254-06:00Michael, I do have a comment or two, but I will wa...Michael, I do have a comment or two, but I will wait until the story is complete. I just might be wrong.JJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14692103477055483000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-14786556514322562082014-01-25T04:58:27.687-06:002014-01-25T04:58:27.687-06:00Saturday January 25th, 2014
Dear Michael,
Your s...Saturday January 25th, 2014<br /><br />Dear Michael,<br /><br />Your story make me think about the passage of time and how words change. You have cleverly used words and phrases that are 'time-markers' for the 'noir-period'. But there is always a risk that anachronisms sneak into your text. It can't be helped. We are not living 1947. You are trying to recreate the feeling of what we think it was like then.<br /><br />If your story is happening 1947, I think “Chicago Air Park.” is a wonderful choice, and lovely 'time-marker', if it really is accurate. I don't know if it really was used for a name for the Chicago Airport at that time, but it seems plausible for a name when it was just a small airport.<br /><br />I am guessing that you do research on all of this.<br /><br />One word that does bother me is 'VINYL', as in 'Rosemary slips into the peeling vinyl seat and gasps.' When was 'vinyl' a common article in everyday life? It may have come a little later, in the fifties and sixties.<br /><br /> I remember the interior of my paternal grandparent's1950-Chevrolet. The seats were made of some kind of woolen material. No vinyl anywhere. <br /><br />The history of plastics could be time-markers in stories if you just could look up when certain products were available to the general public. But I have not yet found that kind of a history book.<br /><br />The names of different plastic material can be different too. What is 'bakalite' or 'lucite'? I know you have one foot in the design world, and know what I am talking about. <br /><br />I'm not saying that you are wrong. Maybe someone has described peeling vinyl seat-covers, but was it 1947 or 1957?<br /><br />I looked up VINYL on the Internet, but found nothing helpful. I wish I could ask my paternal grandmother, but she is no longer available.<br /><br />I maybe the only one who looks at these details. I just don't want you to get angry letters from readers AFTER your story is printed in bookform. Even if this is not the most important thing in your book.<br /><br />Forgive me for being so picky. I really love your story.<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-58768155247772603532014-01-25T04:46:57.886-06:002014-01-25T04:46:57.886-06:00Hello Michael,
You have a way of transporting yo...Hello Michael, <br /><br />You have a way of transporting your reader right to that time and place, the descriptions of late 40's and flying when it was so different from what it is now. So enjoyable.<br /><br />Sorry it has taken me forever to get here. Look forward to reading more of your Noir posts.<br /><br />Best wishes for 2014 and new beginnings and rewrites!<br />Nilanjana.<br /><br />Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.com