tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post6885468787012899647..comments2023-11-16T20:34:36.744-06:00Comments on ... MICHAEL DI GESU ... ... ... In Time ... ...: ANYONE IN THE MOOD FOR ROMANCE?Michael Di Gesuhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-63270135310778241732012-06-06T09:05:48.210-05:002012-06-06T09:05:48.210-05:00Oh now, she's having some major doubts. Great ...Oh now, she's having some major doubts. Great details.Ciarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15628488753277495111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-79705559024823885612012-06-05T17:47:02.714-05:002012-06-05T17:47:02.714-05:00Oh dear, cold feet. I like that's it's th...Oh dear, cold feet. I like that's it's the woman having doubts, and the details are great. Nice work.Stephaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09247707812061900770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-7753633778679244512012-06-04T22:01:16.978-05:002012-06-04T22:01:16.978-05:00She told him to paint and he... did - I say he'...She told him to paint and he... did - I say he's a keeper, grab him!<br /><br />Good piece, I thought it was going to be him who had doubts when she got all snarky. Hope she works out her fears, or at very least he gets his beer. :)Charmaine Clancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18059559142070140041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-2311301438016907552012-06-04T09:34:33.608-05:002012-06-04T09:34:33.608-05:00Well, if he's making her feel cold chills, tha...Well, if he's making her feel <i>cold chills</i>, that's probably not a good sign!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06181241692016438730noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-24563243578020764782012-06-04T01:36:57.346-05:002012-06-04T01:36:57.346-05:00Someone's having serious doubts. I love the de...Someone's having serious doubts. I love the detailing here. It felt as if I was watching the scene on a HD TV.<br /><br />Welcome to RFW! I look forward to reading more of your work.Kiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-52000471172853219882012-06-03T21:45:28.443-05:002012-06-03T21:45:28.443-05:00This definitely fits the theme of indecision. She ...This definitely fits the theme of indecision. She seems to only appreciate his physical attributes but there must be something else about him that she likes that keeps her saying yes, no, yes, no. What about him hooked her in the first place?Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-63174101164897715402012-06-03T09:59:15.466-05:002012-06-03T09:59:15.466-05:00My friend,
I have to say the opening lines had me ...My friend,<br />I have to say the opening lines had me laughing. Don't worry, you had romance and humor. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing.The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-34633784182818651352012-06-03T02:20:23.594-05:002012-06-03T02:20:23.594-05:00Dear Michael,
Nice to meet you!
Welcome to RFW!
...Dear Michael,<br /><br />Nice to meet you!<br />Welcome to RFW! <br /><br />You have written an intriguing text with an opening that makes the reader imagine all kinds of possibilities until you reveal that it is nothing more sinister than a man simply painting a room in his new home! <br /><br />But then, the bantering between him and his bride-to-be reveals that she has doubts. (You even dare to write about <i>her</i> thoughts. Not bad. Not bad at all.) She is going to marry this very handsome man, but is still not quite sure! <br /><br />Actually, I think many women think more about how easy or difficult a man is to get along with. Yes, women do think of how a man looks, but after that: 'Can I really talk with this guy?' Maybe this is what the 'something else' is in her thoughts? <br /><br />Your story fits the theme of indecision perfectly. It is, in every way, an excellent piece of short fiction.<br /><br />I hope you will have time to contribute often to RFW. But if not, you are always welcome when you do!<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><a href="http://annas-adornments.blogspot.se/2012/06/yes-no-oh-all-right-then-romantic.html" rel="nofollow">Anna's RFWers Challenge No 37 'Yes, No, oh, alright then.'</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-59083503486558856672012-06-02T17:15:03.533-05:002012-06-02T17:15:03.533-05:00Michael that was excellent; way to climb back into...Michael that was excellent; way to climb back into the saddle.<br /><br />I too liked the hot/steamy quality to the beginning, and then how subtlely you wove in the doubt and indecision. This is a complicated couple, with lots to work out. I enjoyed reading your flash :)<br /><br />Have a good weekend Dear. Thanks for making time for RFW in your busy schedule :)<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-33904954694129622622012-06-02T12:26:49.955-05:002012-06-02T12:26:49.955-05:00Ooh, I hope you post these every Friday!
Love the ...Ooh, I hope you post these every Friday!<br />Love the tension in this snip - I was waiting for a sweet romance scene, but this one's got some bite. I'd love to see what happens between these two.<br />Love that line about unnecessary highlights!Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-75693141956257358752012-06-02T12:16:49.826-05:002012-06-02T12:16:49.826-05:00I like how there was doubt weaved into this piece ...I like how there was doubt weaved into this piece if you are looking for it. Shannon should be careful! Great pieceHeather Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11847855601653718033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-16686625241211535562012-06-02T00:21:48.539-05:002012-06-02T00:21:48.539-05:00You so wrote how women feel when faced with circum...You so wrote how women feel when faced with circumstances. I love that you can write from our POV. :)Alleged Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04869021184116123477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-66520479649630679682012-06-01T21:09:13.196-05:002012-06-01T21:09:13.196-05:00Forgot to say Michael, come across to RFW on MOnda...Forgot to say Michael, come across to RFW on MOnday if you can to vote for People's Choice! YOu'll find a poll in the sidebar.<br /><br />deniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-33837177885613220262012-06-01T21:08:26.676-05:002012-06-01T21:08:26.676-05:00Hi Michael. Great first job. You got all of us fir...Hi Michael. Great first job. You got all of us fired us, especially the women. Yet Roland has said what I want to say but in a much more literary tone. Run Baby Run is my advice. Isn't it great how you got so much emotion across in so few words? That's one of the challenges of RFW. I think of the prompts as excellent writing exercises which can only help our writing improve.<br /><br />Hope you're not too hot and sweaty in Florida this weekend. Nice and cool here in Oz for a change.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-80650480509276853512012-06-01T20:24:10.796-05:002012-06-01T20:24:10.796-05:00she should run. if he was the one, she'd know...she should run. if he was the one, she'd know. :0) fun piece! and--what? no writing for a while? get back at it, mister! christy (long time no chat, sorry! glad you had a wonderful time in florida!)erica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-81671094089008628452012-06-01T20:17:45.431-05:002012-06-01T20:17:45.431-05:00My guess the answer is NO. This romance went from ...My guess the answer is NO. This romance went from "woo-hoo" to "oh crap" in 375 words.<br /><br />Good job!Mary@GigglesandGunshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07350818228268801008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-43047196121756752862012-06-01T18:57:32.625-05:002012-06-01T18:57:32.625-05:00ooh, I liked this! It starts out all hot and then ...ooh, I liked this! It starts out all hot and then turns ...creepy. Nice.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-77298403037333968182012-06-01T17:31:12.283-05:002012-06-01T17:31:12.283-05:00OOps - gut feeling. She'd better go with it, 9...OOps - gut feeling. She'd better go with it, 9 times out of 10 it's correct! Great first effort, welcome to RFW. I've been MIA from the group but trying to get around and read entries this week.Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-76749089489127067982012-06-01T17:11:07.171-05:002012-06-01T17:11:07.171-05:00Ooh, Michael, very nice emotion packed in there. ...Ooh, Michael, very nice emotion packed in there. I hope Shannon figures it out before it's too late. And gee what a shocking surprise that there's some interior design involved in this scene, ha!<br /><br />Sorry I've been M.I.A. But I <i>think</i> things'll return to a more steady pace now. I'm sure Chicago will still have plenty of liquor in its establishments come July - maybe we can even sit outside somewhere. :)Nicki Elsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11412032684225126973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-43129112164338485642012-06-01T14:37:31.973-05:002012-06-01T14:37:31.973-05:00Hi,
Over from RFW. Oh lordy, vanity doth not beco...Hi,<br /><br />Over from RFW. Oh lordy, vanity doth not become the man...Pity she didn't give the ladder a worthwhile shake! There's good sense of atmosphere and inner soul searching from female perspective this piece. ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-14091286382787648942012-06-01T14:09:25.575-05:002012-06-01T14:09:25.575-05:00Toes are getting cold I see. Better put a ring on ...Toes are getting cold I see. Better put a ring on it ... QUICK! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00273059558675234923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-74986589045362469722012-06-01T13:38:57.416-05:002012-06-01T13:38:57.416-05:00Aw, but such a sad romance.Aw, but such a sad romance.L. Diane Wolfehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06425864276166334896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-13034732559065643402012-06-01T11:15:30.620-05:002012-06-01T11:15:30.620-05:00Cold feet but hot writing! :)Cold feet but hot writing! :)Johanna Garthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15515478890074610814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-23285102837420634842012-06-01T10:37:05.810-05:002012-06-01T10:37:05.810-05:00Oh no poor guy :)Oh no poor guy :)PRhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18081495393769749459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002113089297135210.post-37004043096756957242012-06-01T10:34:13.921-05:002012-06-01T10:34:13.921-05:00Uh-oh. Trouble ahead.
Happy Weekend, Michael, with...Uh-oh. Trouble ahead.<br />Happy Weekend, Michael, with no troubles for you :)Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.com