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Wednesday, March 23, 2011

ATTENTION CRUSADERS .... SECOND CHALLENGE ENTRY




Hello everyone. This past Friday or leader Rach from Rach Writes ... has issued another challenge. This time we have to create an entry of flash fiction starting with "The goldfish bowl teetered ..."

If we write in our genre, in my case, y/a or m/g fantasy/contemporary, we receive extra credit. Well my entry certainly has a whimsical, yet nasty, combination off all. I hope you are all amused.


The goldfish bowl teetered, splashing water onto Foucault’s whiskers. Inches from his gleaming eyes, the delicate, fan-tailed goldfish multiplied in size. He pricked his ears and twitched his tabby-striped tale.

The golden scales reflected in his eyes smoked grey, and the long elegant fans shrunk to mere paddles. Facing Foucault, jagged teeth smiled back at him.
Startled, Foucault leapt into the air. The fish propelled itself, opened its mouth and swallowed him hole. It landed in the bowl an elegant goldfish once more.
“Here, kitty, kitty, kitty.”
Bubbles formed on top of the bowl as the goldfish snickered.







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41 comments:

  1. Rachael HarrieMarch 23, 2011 at 6:03 AM

    Ooh, great twist Michael, love it :) And those pikkies are awesome!

    Hugs,

    Rach

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  2. Cherie ReichMarch 23, 2011 at 8:07 AM

    I agree with Rach. The pictures are amazing. I think the twist is great, but poor kitty.

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  3. AnonymousMarch 23, 2011 at 8:16 AM

    Love that top pic! It really sets up the situation. Nice job!

    Vicki

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  4. T.D. McFrostMarch 23, 2011 at 8:42 AM

    I love it too!

    Great job! :D

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  5. Talli RolandMarch 23, 2011 at 9:39 AM

    Aw, poor poor kitty. Loved it, Michael! :)

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  6. Summer RossMarch 23, 2011 at 9:41 AM

    LOL- well there's a twist I didn't see coming. Nice job!

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  7. AngelaMarch 23, 2011 at 10:04 AM

    Now that's one killer goldfish.

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  8. AnonymousMarch 23, 2011 at 10:12 AM

    I'm always a sucker for the little guy! Go, little fishy! Very visual, Michael. And love the pics!!

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  9. Carol RiggsMarch 23, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    Mwuah-ha-ha! So much for that cat! LOL Nice take from the homicidal fishy angle. Great photos too. :)

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  10. Deniz BevanMarch 23, 2011 at 11:28 AM

    Aww, poor kitty cat! Wonder what else that fish is going to get up to...

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  11. Michael Offutt, Phantom ReaderMarch 23, 2011 at 12:24 PM

    I love the pictures that you chose to accentuate your flash fiction entry. Also the story is awesome...I like the twist in that the fish eats the cat. Completely unexpected.

    Michael, I wanted to pass on to you an award that you don't have yet that's on my latest blog entry. It's the "You're blog doesn't suck" award created by Roguemutt over on his blog and he gave it to me as an award. Anyway, if you'd like it, please have a visit and claim it for your gorgeous blog and then (like the others) pass it on to five more people :) Have a fantastic day.

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  12. Sylvia NeyMarch 23, 2011 at 1:33 PM

    Unfortunately, I did not join the crusade, but I'm looking forward to the "A to Z" challenge and reading more from you - great post. Thanks for sharing!

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  13. Sierra GardnerMarch 23, 2011 at 2:40 PM

    Great twist with the fish eating the cat - I totally didn't see that coming.

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  14. Ben LanghinrichsMarch 23, 2011 at 2:44 PM

    Good twist. Win one for the little guy (guppy?)

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  15. Golden EagleMarch 23, 2011 at 3:07 PM

    Revenge for all past-beleaguered goldfish? :D

    I love the twist in your story!

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  16. Michelle MerrillMarch 23, 2011 at 3:10 PM

    Oh, I loved that :) Way to make the fish win. I swear the cat always gets the glory.

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  17. NasMarch 23, 2011 at 4:32 PM

    So the fish turned the table on the cat! Great!

    BTW, I'm hosting Roland D Yeomans today, who self-published his book THE BEAR WITH TWO SHADOWS and is sharing his journey with us as well as a four book giveaway!

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  18. jkraus8464March 23, 2011 at 5:06 PM

    That was one hell raiser of a goldfish. Great ending! I love the picture.

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  19. UnknownMarch 23, 2011 at 5:06 PM

    Love the story! (and the picture too)

    The Fish Strikes Back has a nice ring to it ... is there a screenplay in the works? :-)

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  20. J.C. MartinMarch 23, 2011 at 6:05 PM

    *LOL* Awesome story, a Jekyll & Hyde fish!

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  21. Denise Covey March 23, 2011 at 7:00 PM

    Michel Foucault indeed Michael. What a wicked story. Loved it. (Maybe you'll wipe the ABNA blues away by winning this! Well, it might help...). And those pics are so good! Could hang around looking at that glittering goldie all day if only i had time.

    Denise<3

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  22. The Words CrafterMarch 23, 2011 at 7:55 PM

    Whoa, I did NOT see that coming, well done! Love the twist :)))

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  23. TrishaMarch 23, 2011 at 7:59 PM

    That sparkly fishy pic is so cute :) Nice story :D

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  24. DanetteMarch 23, 2011 at 8:23 PM

    Very nice! An evil goldfish!! How many goldfish or birds of dreamt of that! Enjoyed it very much!

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  25. Joanna St. JamesMarch 23, 2011 at 9:59 PM

    oh mon dieu!what an evil but perfectly adorable fish. I dont even feel bad for the cat, is that bad?

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  26. N. R. WilliamsMarch 23, 2011 at 10:43 PM

    Now that was funny, I loved it.
    Nancy
    N. R. Williams, The Treasures of Carmelidrium.

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  27. Roland D. YeomansMarch 23, 2011 at 10:56 PM

    Really loved the funny twist at the end! Roland

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  28. Roland D. YeomansMarch 23, 2011 at 10:57 PM

    I love it : I've gone from 96 yesterday to 91 today! Wow, your counter is trying to gaslight me. Roland

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  29. PK HREZOMarch 24, 2011 at 4:36 AM

    Aww, super cute! And I love that name Foucault. :)

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  30. SylviaMarch 24, 2011 at 5:42 AM

    a snickering goldfish! brilliant!!!!

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  31. UnknownMarch 24, 2011 at 9:14 AM

    Great entry! I loved the shift in power, what a twist! Interesting name for the cat, too :))

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  32. AnonymousMarch 24, 2011 at 12:08 PM

    Fabulous and I love the pictures you found!

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  33. Alison Pearce StevensMarch 24, 2011 at 3:14 PM

    Ha! This was great! Especially the snickering goldfish. :)

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  34. Lisa PottsMarch 24, 2011 at 9:40 PM

    Wonderful! I love it when the underdog...uh, fish wins.

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  35. Cally JacksonMarch 25, 2011 at 2:51 AM

    Revenge at last! Great idea!

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  36. Margo BensonMarch 25, 2011 at 4:03 AM

    That had me laughing out loud! Excellent revenge story with wonderful piccies too!

    Thank you for your kind comments about me and MrB :-)

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  37. Donea LeeMarch 25, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    Ah! Goldfish revenge!! Love it ~ :) Michael, this is a great twist on the prompt. Thanks!

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  38. Witless ExpositionMarch 25, 2011 at 12:58 PM

    Great job! I'm glad that one of the goldfish from the crusaders got their revenge. :)

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  39. AnonymousMarch 25, 2011 at 1:09 PM

    Great twist didn't see it coming. Great job!

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  40. Alison MillerMarch 26, 2011 at 7:00 AM

    Yes! Revenge of the Goldfish! Cute story!

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  41. Kari MarieMarch 26, 2011 at 9:31 PM

    Naughty fish! I love your twist to the story.

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