Monday, October 24, 2011


Hi, all,

First, I would like to thank all of you for the encouraging support on my last post. Your comments meant so much to me and my friend. She couldn't believe what an amazing support system our community has. You are all SO special to me.

Since my time with her was constant, I never had the chance to finish my third segment for the Rule of 3. It saddened me to be disqualified, but my friendship means more to me than any prizes. Friends should be cherished.

So for all of you who have supported me by dropping by for the first two segments, here is the third. I hope you enjoy it. I will definitely have the fourth on time for those of you who might want to wait until Wednesday.

Thanks again for your friendship and patience.


The captain stirred from a throbbing pain exploding inside his temples. A trembling hand wiped the dripping blood away from his eyes as he rolled onto his knees. 
His lips twisted into a sinister grin. “The kid’s got balls.” He spat out saliva mixed with blood. “Let’s see how long it will take for me to catch up to you sonny boy.” A maniacal laugh escaped through his stretched lips.
Standing on weakened legs, he straightened up to his full height, stepped into the hall and opened the linen closet. He grabbed the first aid kit tucked away under the bath towels. 
A moment later, he entered into the bathroom and flipped on the switch. Hallowed eyes stared at the crusted bump and congealed blood clinging to the side of his face.
After a quick wash, he swabbed the wounds with peroxide, smeared on anti-bacterial cream, wrapped his head with gauze, and then taped up the ends.
“This should do ... now where did my little mouse go? This cat’s hungry.” His eyes lit for a brief moment as he tore out of the bathroom and down the stairs.
He glanced at the clock. Cursing, he flung open the front door. Panes of glass rattled within its frame from the sheer force of the slam after he darted through over the threshold.. A sleek black Volvo awakened with a toot and a flash of headlights.
Out of the corner of his eye, he spotted a rusted red pick up. Releasing the accelerator, the car coasted past the gas station and boarding house. He spotted a dirt road, turned onto it, and continued into a thick mass of Elm trees.
With the cunning of an alley cat, he slinked out of the car and moved toward the structure.
He hid in the shadows, only the meager lamppost cast an single beam of light. Peeking into the grungy window, he spotted his prey. Moistening his lips, he grinned. “I hope you enjoy your meal sonny boy ... it will be your last.”
Dark, brooding eyes flicked to a teenage red-headed girl. Hmmmm. Tasty. I hope he got some of that. It would be a shame to leave this world without one last roll in the hay.
The captain’s eyes swept the scene once more, zeroing in on the layout of the interior. A plan rippled through his brain like waves to a shore. 
“In just a few short hours, sonny boy, we’ll meet again.” He inhaled a long, deep breath and disappeared into the darkness.

Click here for part one.

Click here for part two.

I hope you enjoy them everyone.


Danette said...

So glad you had a good time with your friend Michael. Friendships should be cherished and blog events come and go. There will be another, another day!

Elliot Grace said...

...missed the first segment, but have thoroughly enjoyed the past two, Michael.

Well done ;)


mshatch said...

so glad you had fun with your friend :)

loved this third segment. holy cow, I sure wouldn't want to be related to that guy. what a nightmare!

Golden Eagle said...

I'm glad to hear you had fun with your friend. :)

Great REN3 installment!

Alleged Author said...

Your dialogue is phenomenal. Authentic dialogue is hard to capture, and you've done an excellent job here!

dolorah said...

I'm glad you got your priorities straight Michael; you worked to hard to get her to visit to just leave her hanging. Tough decision I know, but real life comes first.

This was excellent, and from the Capt's POV too. I've a feeling more blood is about to be shed. The plot to this is seriously taking a dark bent; and I like it.

.......dhole said...

Awesome!! I'm definitely going back to read the others.

Talli Roland said...

Oh yay! I'm happy to read the third one - I remember really enjoying the first two! Happy Tuesday, Michael. It is Tuesday, right?

Michael Offutt, Phantom Reader said...

Great riveting post you've got here. I love the nitty gritty, if not dark, details. Your characters always sound so angry and so abusive.

Mary@GigglesandGuns said...

This bastard is so sick!
Great job!

Laura said...

Okay - 'gripped' is the only word. I couldn't stop reading. That throbbing, seething, controlled anger is terrifying! I'm so glad you and your friend had a great time
Laura x

Heather said...

You're absolutely right, friendship must come first! Thank you for sharing this with us despite not making it into the challenge. Wow, now that is an antagonist I can love to hate!

N. R. Williams said...

Scary guy. Well written Michael with lots of tension.

Abby Fowers said...

Hello Michael. Thank you for visiting my blog today. I am happy to be able to find your blog as well. This is a wonderful post. You are very talented. I can't wait to go read parts 1 and 2 now.

Also - I think it is wonderful that you are such a great friend. Those are hard to come by these days.

Sarah Tokeley said...

Smart man, to know where the priorities are - and thank you for not leaving us hanging and posting this for us. Can't wait to read the ending!

Anonymous said...

Ooooh, creepy! This gave me goosebumps. I could hear the guy's voice in my head.

Just Another Day in Paradise said...

Hi Michael. Just stopping by from the Pay It Forward blogfest. I'm kinda slow,but I like to read the blogs and not just hit and run.

Very creative space. I love your illustrations. would love to stop back, but I can't figure out how to follow this blog. Sorry, I'm blond and somewhat cyber challenged.

Visit me and tell me how,if you care to.

Ciara said...

I'm glad you had a great time with your friend. Friendship is so important.

I've enjoyed your REN!

farawayeyes said...

Michael, thanks for stopping by. I found it. Was on my other site so I'm following you as far away eyes (that's the site for my books) Just Another Day in Paradise is my personal Journal (rant). I'm never sure who I'm signed into.

Sorry for so much confusion. Still blonde, still cyber challenged and having a bad day. Still like your site and now I can find my way back.

Unknown said...

I have been reading the stories involved in this challenge and they are so amazing and yet different. I like this part. The ending leaves things open. Thanks for sharing the story with us.

David P. King said...

You're awesome. Your story and your commitment. You've set up nicely for the last installment. Hope to read it soon. :)

Talei said...

Oh - this is very visual and dark - lots of atmosphere, I love it!

And I love that you and your friend were reunited after so long. True friendships don't have timelines, its always like yesterday when you meet up again. I know. xx

PS: I thought I'd signed up to a Halloween blogfest of yours? Do let me know, I appear to have lost track of whose blogfest I doing now. ;-))

Deniz Bevan said...

So glad to hear you had a great time with your friend!
And I'm glad too that you're continuing the story. Can't wait for the final installment!

LTM said...

I can tell you've been a busy fellow! Yay for reconnecting with your friend, and rock on with the writing. Stay warm, and Happy Halloween!!! :o) <3